AnimalDenWinter Posted April 14, 2013 Report Share Posted April 14, 2013 W O L F. The hunter was running. Running through the trees. Th wolf was hunting the hunter. The hunter slid down a fire licked bank. The wolf leapt over. The wolfs yellow eyes flashing through the trees like traffic lights. The hunter was scared, for losing his life. Its white claws lashed and scratched. The hunter had fell like worthless ash. Please leave a like or post. I don't do poems at all so I don't know if this really is a poem. At least it should be good for you. 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dog Posted April 14, 2013 Report Share Posted April 14, 2013 Wolf A wolf had to run a bit And he had a giant fit Once he was gone from home He was scared and alone The wolf walked home with a bad back And stepped on a big crack He finally got home And howled I am no longer alone. Created By LIl Dog 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Is not JL Posted April 14, 2013 Report Share Posted April 14, 2013 @Wolf, I would say.... Too many sentences starting with 'The', and that isn't something you can emphasize through repetition. @Lil Dog, I think if you made that poem about li'l dogs, it would've been better. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BeckoningZebra1 Posted April 15, 2013 Report Share Posted April 15, 2013 This Poem doesn't even rhyme it's literally written like this: A B C D E F G H H RHYME SCHEME- The Poem Lil' Dog wrote on the other hand did rhyme: A A B B C C D D RHYME SCHEME + Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
тυcкєя Posted April 16, 2013 Report Share Posted April 16, 2013 Nice poem for someone that hasnt done yet one. My teacher made me and my classmate make all sorts of poems, I hated it I am not a poem guy js. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnimeAddict Posted April 17, 2013 Report Share Posted April 17, 2013 thats not bad course ive been "out of the game " for a while XD Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AnimalDenWinter Posted April 19, 2013 Author Report Share Posted April 19, 2013 thanks for all the negative posts guys...:'( Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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