Halo: Task Force Delta

[Archon]

Prologue: Unleash the Beast

 

 

 

Gabriel was a soldier in the UNSC Marines, his current task was to finish his training at the Meat Grinder, he was specializing in the way of the sniper because he was the best eye, had the best accuracy, most endurance, phenomenal reflexes, Spartan-like speed and a speed disorder, he wasn’t the strongest, or the most powerful however, he was like a snake, reliant on grass to hide him, but once he struck he killed his target almost instantly. His voice was his neurotoxin, putting people and aliens alike into their places. His drill sergeant even thought he was some sort of ONI spook, steering clear of a man who’d actually never seen combat.

 

They were all lined up in front of Sergeant First Class Glaze, and First Lieutenant Reed. Gabriel held utter-contempt for the two men and stared coldly at them, but otherwise stood at ease just like everyone else in the line.

 

“Today,” Began the Sergeant as he cleared his throat in that awkward Sergeant sort of way and glanced at the faces before him. “Today you’re entering an exercise that almost mirrors real life combat, minus the split-chin freaks and the ‘fearless’ grunts of course.” He notified them and stood tall and straight and folded his hands behind his back. It was a joke but nobody caught on, nobody had ever heard the Sergeant make a joke or talk at ease.

 

“Aha.” Said Gabriel, making false laughing noises to break the silence- Everyone broke out into laughter as he did, it was Gabriel’s humor, nobody actually understood the humor but everyone found it to be funny, they could laugh at something that nobody but Gabriel could understand but never be able to laugh at the Sergeant.

 

“Quiet!” Lieutenant Reed shouted over the laughter and it almost instantaneously stopped. He glared at Gabriel, whom could tell that Mr. Reed held resentment for him.

 

I’ll put you in your place… just like everyone else

 

Gabriel turned his head slowly to face Reed directly and gave him a stone cold glare. “Sorry sir, but I’m straight, mind looking at somebody else for once?” Gabriel asked him, and Reed turned red, his entire face flushed red with complete anger and rage and Gabriel nodded slightly. “Sorry to break it to you, Lieutenant.” He stated, mock sincerity in his voice.

 

The Lieutenant immediately turned his head and spoke to everyone else, completely ignoring Gabriel from that point on.

 

“This simulation is going to be a Three-way, those with a Yellow patch aka Bravo Platoon, make your way towards the North-end of the Valley, Those with a Red patch, aka Alpha Platoon head towards the east end of the valley, and finally… those with the blue-patch, aka Delta Platoon, head towards the west end of the valley. The simulation will end once the last team or man is standing.” Reed briefed them and everyone nodded and shouted a series of yes sirs and affirmatives- Before they made their way to their designated base locations. Gabriel was a member of Delta… to him they were the best of the best, back in the day at least. There was still a Delta Force today, but they were all a part of the ODST Division in the Marines, and to become an ODST you had to volunteer, or be selected, and pass the Meatgrinder- but every ODST who’d seen enough combat either become insane or shell-shocked beyond the point of being normal again- but once you kill enough living things… or even your first, you’d never be normal again.

 

"BLUE-Platoon will have their ordnance and assets removed from the battlefield. You can thank Ghost for his attitude." The Lieutenant said.

[The Director]

It's good, but not that realistic. No marine would ever get away with that kind of insubordination with an NCO, not to mention an actual commissioned officer. You should add a part where the officer punishes him in some way, or at least gives him a verbal reprimand and forces him to apologize. And if not the officer, than perhaps the NCO does it out of sheer duty.

[Archon]

Is it not possible to receive punishment in the future and not the present? Or is the present what really matters? Every action everyone make has repercussions. Either good or bad.

 

 

I've implemented a punishment into Chapter 3, (Ch.2 is in dif. PoV.)

 

Worry not. The realism in my story is beyond normal.

 

P.S: I love how when I don't ask for constructive criticism, I receive it, but once I do. I don't.

[The Director]

Well he may be punished in the future, however insubordination (as it details in NCO training courses) must be dealt with at the time it rears it's ugly head, otherwise other marines may start to think it's okay. This is usually done by a verbal reprimand (if it is right before a training op, or before some other duty that has to be finished at an allotted time) and then actual physical reprimand or NJP at a later time.

[Archon]

How does throwing him into a Warsim without a weapon, armor, or anything but a nutrition bar and blade sound?

[The Director]

That sounds good for the later part of the punishment equation. However there still should be a verbal reprimand to clearly let the other troops know that this sort of thing isn't tolerated. The thing about physical punishments is that they do not usually show everyone WHY he is being punished.

[Archon]

Meh. One sentence at the end of the prologue is all it takes.